After a beautiful day.John and max the dog went for a walk after they went for a walk they climbed up onto a rock.John heard his dog barking he asked max why are you barking?John went over to see what he was barking at there it was a baby bird sitting in a nest on the ground i said to myself that is dangerous so i put on some gloves and picked up the baby bird and put it in the tree.One minute after that came a big bird flying with the wind blowing with some food the baby bird chirped,so i left it alone and went back to the rock.Then i was dying for some icy cold water so i went back home and got some water as well as some food.A while after that I heard a strongly weird sound coming from the back door so i quickly rushed to see what it was and it was my dog knocked over the lamp staring out the window looking at some kids playing in their back yard after that i walked of to watch some television.
I like that john helped the baby bird in the tree because you help an animals out. You need to work on I's not i's.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you described the bird because the man put on gloves and rescued the bird from a dangerous place.
ReplyDeleteNext time you could try to put in correct punctuation.